Population in age groups and expected figures

The pie charts illustrate the percentage of population on various ages in the countries of Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 and its prediction for 2050.

The most significant feature is that number of people who are more than 60 years is expected to increase significantly in the year 2050 in both countries.

From the first two pie charts, it can be clearly seen that, in 2000, almost half of the Yemen  population was 0-14 years (52%) whereas, its rate is  expected to be 37% in 2050. However, the percentage of 15-59 years was 46.3%  while, in 2050, it is predicted that it will go up to 57.3%. Meanwhile, only 3.6% was accounted for old people in 2000 while, its number is likely to get escalated in 2050, (5.7%).

Moving to second two charts, it is evident that, more than half of population was 15-59 years whereas, its rate is likely to be  46.2% in 2050. Similarly, the percentage of 0-14 years also is to decline from 14.3% to 11.5% in 2050. However, the number of old people is to be very high in 2050.

 To sum up, it is obvious from the charts that ( no comma)  younger population (0-14) is  expected to decline in 2050 in both countries. 

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